Thursday, October 9, 2014

Really rough draft. More like a jotting of disconnected ideas, tangled with personal thoughts.

A Government In Thrall of Religion
Frank R Zindler

A Call to Atheist America: How Zindler Reaffirms Religion must be Expelled from Government

In A Government in Thrall of Religion, Zindler launches a series of strikes against President Bush’s policies and religion, making an emotional appeal for Atheist America to “restore a semblance of sanity” in American politics. This piece is rife with subtle wordings that undermine Bush’s authority, humorous biblical analogies undermining administrative choices, repetitive phrasing and questions that create draw attention to certain issues, structural parallels to the Declaration of Independence, strong images of nature that makes primitive the role of religion, and makes radical accusations designed to arouse strong emotions. By confidently implementing these tools in his article, Zindler creates an emotionally powerful but logically weak call to restore the American government to “the road of reality.”

Subtle Wording
Zindler demonstrates personal biases in his subtle wording. While these wordings strengthen Zindler’s arguments by undermining Bush’s authority and validity of his decisions, it also weakens his argument because it makes his own biases very transparent.  REPETITIVE Bush is consistently referred to as “Mr Bush,” as if to indicate he is not worthy of being called the President. He is only referred to as “President Bush” when he is being made fun of, such as when Zindler compares Bush to the “angel…from the Garden of Eden.” By recognizing Bush as a President only to compare him to what Zindler perceives to be a whimsical fictional tyrant, Zindler discounts Bush’s authority as President. Zindler also manipulates adjectives to demonize Bush. For instance, he accuses Bush of siding with “greedy, conscienceless” corporations and “suppressing” funds. The use of these strong adjectives causes the reader to associate the subject, Bush, with these words with negative connotations. For instance, the use of the word “suppressing” in regards to funds implies that Bush is singlehandedly preventing progress that would otherwise been easily carried out.

Government in Thrall with Religion also utilizes biblical analogies in order to poke fun at religion. This provides contrast with the serious subject Zindler is addressing, undermines the seriousness of religion and makes him seem more knowledgeable to his audience. Pertaining to Bush, Zindler says that “He knoweth not what he doeth.” By framing Bush’s ignorance in this context, Zindler makes himself appear as the more knowledgeable of the two. Here, Zindler assumes a position of authority as the narrator of events, describing a small child.  WHAT? YOU’RE NOT MAKING ANY SENSE ON PAPER SARAH. 

There is a consistent use of repetitive phrases and questions throughout this piece. Zindler attacks Bush’s actions through the repetition of the “If he…[insert synonym for ‘understood’]” in order to point out perceived failings in Bush’s policy decisions. The use of short, impactful repetitions allows the reader to clearly see the failings of the former President. WHY THOUGH? While this is effective emotional manipulation as the reader clearly is able to see the many faults of the President, at times it oversimplifies, summarizing a complex issue in a few words only allowing the audience to see a single perspective of an issue. GIVE EXAMPLE HERE

This piece ends with a repetitious “we must…” call to action. This emotional revival almost takes on a sermonic rhythm of calling “godless Americans” to remedy the malady of religion. While the rhythm and repetition of this technique is emotionally appealing, it fails to make logical sense. For instance, Zindler argues that ignorance spurred by religion “threatens our species with extinction.” What evidence does Zindler have behind this claim? NEEDS SOMETHING HERE BUT I CAN’T THINK RIGHT NOW

Loose Parallel structure to Declaration of Independence
States what the government should look like, then follows this with a list of grievances. Instead of tea taxes, it’s pulling out of cloning projects. The only difference is Zidler ends with a call to action.

Similarly, this speech echoes the structure of the Declaration of Independence. This famed document first has a preamble describing the extraordinary context for a declaration, boldly declares perceived truths of the world, lists grievances against King George, then declares the desired rights. The structure of this article first describes the context—lack of separation between church and state in today’s government, boldly declares the perceived truth that “Nothing fails like prayer,” proceeds to list grievances against President Bush, then declares the desired outcome—for “godless Americans” to change the world. By patterning Zindler’s argument against the document that was one of the first steps of creating an independent America, Zindler infers that this issue holds the same amount of importance as Americans declaring independence from Britain. Likewise by creating this comparison, Zidler effectively makes deep accusations that the seriousness of the tyrannous actions of President Bush are like the actions of King George. CONCLUDING SENTENCE HERE

At times, this speech resembled a creative writing exercise more than a serious speech. Zindler uses many extreme images subjecting religion to being an insensitive and demeaning entity. He calls religious followers “minions…ignorant of everything”, describes faith as a “dark and swelling tide,” and has priests feeding at “monetary mangers created for the public weal.” By comparing religious followers to “minions,” Zindler implies that religious people are simply blind followers of priests and pastors. Zindler confidently and singularly states his case then moves on to his point. This both hinders and helps his argument. Logically, this makes no sense as he provides no evidence to back up his claim but is emotionally impactful as he asserts himself confidently, allowing the audience to place trust in his claims because he trusts himself. MAKE THIS MAKE SENSE. IT MAKES NO SENSE SARAH. By placing priests feeding at “monetary mangers,” Zindler victimizes religious parishes. Priests are victimized because they are reduced to animalistic status, indicating that they cannot think or act for themselves because they are simply animals. While this is clearly a personal opinion with no evidence apparent in the document, it remains powerful because it is a memorable analogy. SOME SORT OF CONCLUSION HERE.

By making radical accusations against religion and the Bush administration, Zindler reassures his atheist audience that his views are indeed similar to their views. Furthermore, however illogical pointed and unsubstantiated accusations such as “religion fosters ignorance” may seem, they do make his speech poignant and memorable. Without substantiated evidence for his claims, Zindler does not tire his listener with listening to his reasoning but assumes the audience can come to agree with him. WHAT SARAH? WHAT YOU ARE WRITING MAKES NO SENSE. 


In conclusion, Zindler creates an effective attack on religion and the Bush administration for a primarily atheistic audience. His radical but unsubstantiated claims and powerful imagery serve as a double edged sword; they reaffirm the confidence he has in his positions but  logically make little sense. The parallels he plays between the constitution and the bible draw upon emotions of patriotism. For according to Zindler, religion is child’s folly and only the educated have the capacity to stop it from “threatening our species with extinction.”

Wednesday, October 8, 2014

Thesis Proposal/Outline and random thoughts

A Government In Thrall of Religion
Frank R Zindler

Zindler gives an emotional call to Atheist America to “restore a semblance of sanity” in American politics by launching a series of strikes against President Bush’s policies and religion. This piece is rife with subtle wordings that undermine Bush’s authority, humorous biblical analogies undermining administrative choices, repetitive phrasing and questions that create draw attention to certain issues, structural parallels to the Declaration of Independence, strong nature imagery that makes primitive the role of religion and radical accusations designed to arouse strong emotions. By confidently implementing these tools in his article, Zindler creates an emotionally powerful but logically weak call to restore the American government to a “the road of reality.”

Subtle Wording
Zindler refers to Bush as “Mr Bush” and refrains from addressing him as a President unless he is mocking his position.
  • “President Bush, like the angel who chased Adam and Eve from the Garden of Eden.”
Consistent use of the preposition anti-, and words with negative connotations
-anti-environmental, suppress, greedy, consciousless, etc.
“He knoweth not what he doeth.”

Biblical Humor through extreme examples
  • “He knoweth not what he doeth”
  • President Bush, like the angel who chased Adam and Eve from the Garden of Eden, does not want us to have a chance to eat the fruit of the tree of life.
What purpose does this play? Zindler is trying to say he knows all the biblical stories and is just as in tune with what the bible may say as his opponents are.

Repetitive Phrasing and Questions
  • “If he… (had a firm grasp, could understand, realized…)
  • Mr Bush (accusation, deprived, pulled out of…)
  • Repetition of “We must.”

Loose Parallel structure to Declaration of Independence
  • States what the government should look like, then follows this with a list of grievances. Instead of tea taxes, it’s pulling out of cloning projects. The only difference is Zidler ends with a call to action.

Nature Imagery
  • dark and swelling tide of superstition
  • foxes to guard our henhouses
  • chance to eat the fruit of the tree of life
  • acorns are not oak trees
  • Trojan Horse in a public barn
  • horse must be put out to pasture in the churchyard

Radical Accusations
  • Nothing fails like prayer
  • Mispronunciation of the word nuclear would seem to signal the total depth of his understanding of physics
  • He can collude with greedy and conscienceless corporations
  • He thinks ecologists are just wacko tree hugging bird watching eccentrics who don’t understand economics.
  • It is the ignorance fostered by religion that now threatens our very species with extinction.
If religion fosters ignorance, why are we still alive?
What evidence do you have that prayer always fails?
Where did your ideas come from?
But do the said questions apply to an atheist audience?



Friday, October 3, 2014

Faith in America

Purpose of the piece: To appease those who feel that Romney's religion is incongruous with being an American leader and "calm Americans' concerns about his Mormon religion" (see next article). The official reason would probably just be because Romney wanted to address the role of religion in America.

Ethos: Governor Romney establishes ethos by sharing personal experiences of how he is a "religious, moral man," attempts to identify with the reader by appealing to those with a faith in God, and implies that he is trying to identify with all who are 'good, moral people.’

Pathos: Romney uses concrete examples such as explaining his parents marched for civil rights and worked in a soup kitchen. He also uses strong phrases such as, "theocratic tyranny" and "symphony of faith" as opposed to "secular government" or "faithful group." 


Logos: Romney's arguments are accountable as he mainly uses life examples. It seems his target audience was other religious groups, trying to convince them that Mormons border on "normality." I don't think his scope reached atheists, because he basically disregards their existence.  His words are relevant to a predominantly Christian audience, but don’t reach much further than that. I also felt that his argument was too focused on the faith aspect. This is especially not useful because a lot of people that this was meant to reach don’t have faith in the same thing. In fact, I’m pretty sure that the only similarities in faith was that both the audience and speaker thought they were right.  I think he could have also done a better job distinguishing religion as he sees it and religion as it is manifest in derogatory manners elsewhere. He addresses the “creed of conversion by conquest” but doesn’t talk about extremists and how to differ between the two. I think his approach that people and religion are inseparable could have been approached differently. 

Wednesday, October 1, 2014

Pathos: Why I can't Stop Reading Mormon Mommy Blogs

How does the author use pathos to appeal to the reader?

At some point in time, everybody feels like their life is unfulfilling. Everyone needs an escape from reality.

That's the main emotional link that the author uses to hook the reader. Mommy blogs are her escape from a reality of work and other chaos. Each one of us has a reality of conflicting conflicts, and can relate. Furthermore, some people argue women can't "have it all"--a life of a flourishing career, a happy family with kids and sanity at the same time. This article has the author on the opposite end of the spectrum from the bloggers she discusses, thus appealing to people on both ends of the spectrum as well as everyone in between.

Reflective Statement


I think the trap that I fell into was treating this opinion editorial like a personal statement. Instead

of making a strong argument for something, I really just wanted to write a bunch of creative,

quotable sentences that left a punch. I was more interested in being catchy than the actual

substance, when it really should have been the other way around. However, spending time on

writing sentences I enjoyed did make the writing process more interesting.

The hardest part of writing this paper was making my ideas flow nicely together. I ended

up with about five catchy and wonderful introductions, then a few short paragraphs of

substance. The difficult part was reversing that order—getting one wonderful introduction and a

myriad of meaty points to back my claim up.

 The other part of this assignment that was difficult was that my personal opinion

switched halfway through writing this paper. I read a book by Elder Bednar, “Act In Doctrine”,

which articulated quite a few amazing ways to teach that essentially persuaded me that

teaching the doctrines instead of discussing the questions was a more important topic to

discuss. If we taught, and were taught pure doctrines and principles, there would be no need for

my essay. If I was to redo my opinion editorial, I would discuss how our classrooms need to

focus more on teaching pure Gospel Principles and Doctrines and less on applications of

Principles and Doctrines. This is essentially the entire converse of my argument but essentially

gets down to the core of the issue.

 All things considered though, I think the most useful thing that I did in preparation for this

assignment was rereading my favorite opinion articles collected over time in order to see how

different authors effectively utilized their own styles.